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I love this imagery
Lovely haiku ~ I like the contrast of cedar and darkness ~
beautiful imagery..loved it !!
Love yours - ♥
So lovely, Barbara, whiteness outside and the little bird gathering the dark inside.
Awesome 'word-painting' well done.
Love the word-play!!!Live to die at home!
A painting in words, I agree
White cedar gathering darkness -- such a beautiful combination of words and imagery
really nice use of a sparrow flying
Nie znając języka, tłumacz Google tu nie pomoże, trudno zrozumieć zabawę. Pozdrawiam więc serdecznie i przesyłam buziaka. Not knowing the language, Google translator will not help, it's hard to understand the game. So I greet warmly and sending a kiss.
Giga, thank you for visiting. What I have been writing is haiku. This is a form of poetry from the Japanese and I am quite sure that the google translator makes it difficult for you to understand what I have written. I am also a beginner so I don't know how well I am succeeding in following the 'rules' of haiku! Thanks for reading though!
For a beginner, Barbara, I think you are following the "rules" quite well!
Is it the sparrow or the cedar gathering darkness? I suppose it doesn't really matter, for darkness is overtaking both, and the little bird needs to find its way home before it can no longer see to fly...Desert Home
Interesting. Thank you for this comment. I have another version of this poem. a bird flies in and out of the cedar gathering darkness But this did not reflect what I actually saw, which was a series of birds flying into their roosting spot in the cedar for the night.
Beautiful imagery, Barbara. You can still write about the sparrow..a sparrow fliesin and out of the cedargathering darknessNice contrast... Also, the element of mystery. The reader may think which is gathering the darkness. :-)
Lovely word-picture! Soft and subtle!
Such truth in few syllables.