Nie znając języka, tłumacz Google tu nie pomoże, trudno zrozumieć zabawę. Pozdrawiam więc serdecznie i przesyłam buziaka. Not knowing the language, Google translator will not help, it's hard to understand the game. So I greet warmly and sending a kiss.
Giga, thank you for visiting. What I have been writing is haiku. This is a form of poetry from the Japanese and I am quite sure that the google translator makes it difficult for you to understand what I have written. I am also a beginner so I don't know how well I am succeeding in following the 'rules' of haiku! Thanks for reading though!
Is it the sparrow or the cedar gathering darkness? I suppose it doesn't really matter, for darkness is overtaking both, and the little bird needs to find its way home before it can no longer see to fly...
I love this imagery
ReplyDeleteLovely haiku ~ I like the contrast of cedar and darkness ~
ReplyDeletePerfection, haiku-wise.
ReplyDeletebeautiful imagery..loved it !!
ReplyDeleteLove yours - ♥
ReplyDeleteSo lovely, Barbara, whiteness outside and the little bird gathering the dark inside.
ReplyDeleteAwesome 'word-painting' well done.
ReplyDeleteLove the word-play!!!
ReplyDeleteLive to die at home!
A painting in words, I agree
ReplyDeleteWhite cedar gathering darkness -- such a beautiful combination of words and imagery
ReplyDeleteBeautiful haiku
ReplyDeletereally nice use of a sparrow flying
ReplyDeleteNie znając języka, tłumacz Google tu nie pomoże, trudno zrozumieć zabawę. Pozdrawiam więc serdecznie i przesyłam buziaka.
ReplyDeleteNot knowing the language, Google translator will not help, it's hard to understand the game. So I greet warmly and sending a kiss.
Giga, thank you for visiting. What I have been writing is haiku. This is a form of poetry from the Japanese and I am quite sure that the google translator makes it difficult for you to understand what I have written. I am also a beginner so I don't know how well I am succeeding in following the 'rules' of haiku! Thanks for reading though!
DeleteFor a beginner, Barbara, I think you are following the "rules" quite well!
DeleteIs it the sparrow or the cedar gathering darkness? I suppose it doesn't really matter, for darkness is overtaking both, and the little bird needs to find its way home before it can no longer see to fly...
ReplyDeleteDesert Home
Interesting. Thank you for this comment. I have another version of this poem.
Deletea bird flies
in and out of the cedar
gathering darkness
But this did not reflect what I actually saw, which was a series of birds flying into their roosting spot in the cedar for the night.
Beautiful imagery, Barbara. You can still write about the sparrow..
Deletea sparrow flies
in and out of the cedar
gathering darkness
Nice contrast... Also, the element of mystery. The reader may think which is gathering the darkness. :-)
Lovely word-picture! Soft and subtle!
ReplyDeleteLovely word-picture! Soft and subtle!
ReplyDeletelovely imagery
ReplyDeleteSuch truth in few syllables.
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