Saturday, October 6, 2012

Home



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a sparrow flies
into the white cedar
gathering darkness

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Linked to Haiku Heights in response to the prompt 'home.'





22 comments:

  1. Lovely haiku ~ I like the contrast of cedar and darkness ~

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  2. beautiful imagery..loved it !!

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  3. So lovely, Barbara, whiteness outside and the little bird gathering the dark inside.

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  4. White cedar gathering darkness -- such a beautiful combination of words and imagery

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  5. Nie znając języka, tłumacz Google tu nie pomoże, trudno zrozumieć zabawę. Pozdrawiam więc serdecznie i przesyłam buziaka.
    Not knowing the language, Google translator will not help, it's hard to understand the game. So I greet warmly and sending a kiss.

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    1. Giga, thank you for visiting. What I have been writing is haiku. This is a form of poetry from the Japanese and I am quite sure that the google translator makes it difficult for you to understand what I have written. I am also a beginner so I don't know how well I am succeeding in following the 'rules' of haiku! Thanks for reading though!

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    2. For a beginner, Barbara, I think you are following the "rules" quite well!

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  6. Is it the sparrow or the cedar gathering darkness? I suppose it doesn't really matter, for darkness is overtaking both, and the little bird needs to find its way home before it can no longer see to fly...

    Desert Home

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    1. Interesting. Thank you for this comment. I have another version of this poem.

      a bird flies
      in and out of the cedar
      gathering darkness

      But this did not reflect what I actually saw, which was a series of birds flying into their roosting spot in the cedar for the night.

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    2. Beautiful imagery, Barbara. You can still write about the sparrow..

      a sparrow flies
      in and out of the cedar
      gathering darkness

      Nice contrast... Also, the element of mystery. The reader may think which is gathering the darkness. :-)

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  7. Lovely word-picture! Soft and subtle!

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  8. Lovely word-picture! Soft and subtle!

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